Sample model essay for Task 2 – discuss and give opinion

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In my last post I wrote about how to organize an answer for this Task 2 question:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Following the 4-paragraph plan I wrote, here is my sample model essay:

Star athletes like LeBron James, Tiger Woods, and Manny Pacquiao receive multi-million dollar contracts which are exponentially more than what other important professionals are paid. This has led to controversy over whether this is justified and fair. Although I can understand why some people feel this is unfair, I feel professional athletes are justified in receiving this pay.

No one can deny that there are many people who provide much more meaningful services that directly help or impact individuals and communities. People such as teachers, caregivers and healthcare workers affect so many people by making their lives better and comfortable. Despite their hard work and valuable service, they unfortunately aren’t paid the same exorbitant wages as sport professionals, which seems unfair.

On the other hand, salary unfortunately does not always reflect the importance, need or value of a job. In fact, salary more often reflects how much money the employer or the business can  pay. Professional athletes are part of the billion-dollar sports and entertainment industry that plays a large part in the economy. A lot of consumers choose to pay money for pro sports and related products, so the team owners have the money to pay these players huge sums. Therefore, it’s justified that these players get their share of the profits. To put this in perspective, elderly adults who need caregivers do not have a lot of money to pay their caregivers, and so caregivers earn little.

In short, the large sums of money that sports professionals receive is justified because they are earning that money from their employers by doing their jobs of entertaining and raising profits for their employers.

(273 words)

Vocabulary/expressions to take note of:

  • to put this in perspective
  • no one can deny
  • others words used for “a lot of money”: huge sums, exorbitant wages, large sums of money, multi-million dollar contracts, profits

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3 comments on “Sample model essay for Task 2 – discuss and give opinion
  1. Dieu Ly says:

    i like this writing, but i just wonder that “sport professionals” or “”sports professionals” is correct. is there any difference btw them?

  2. Pearl says:

    Hi Dieu,

    To be honest, this was the term used in the question. As an American, “sports professional” sounds right to me. But Americans use “sports” while British/Kiwi/Aussie’s tend to use “sport”. If in doubt, use professional athlete!

    Good luck w/ your studies.

  3. Asha says:

    I really like the way you justified this essay.Although I am happy the way you tutored for the structure of each kind of essay but is there any structure / format that can be created along with phrases from intro to conclusion for the 4 kinds of essay.

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