I wrote about how to write the detail paragraph for the IELTS Task 1 essay in this post here. I explained how to describe and compare data in this paragraph. In this post I’ll give my full sample essay.
Here is the Task question:
The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 – 2101. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.
For the outline/plan of paragraphs for this graph, I wrote:
1. Introduction paragraph (paraphrase the title of the graph/chart)
2. Overview/Summary paragraph – this states the overall trends or features of the graph that are important. It clearly summarizes what the data shows.
3. Detail paragraph of first important feature/trend
4. Detail paragraph of second important feature/trend
Here is my full sample essay:
The graph shows changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 with projections through to 2101.
Overall there was a rise in birth and death rates from 1901 with a large gap between high birth rates and much lower death rates. However, by the 21st century this wide gap starts to close with death rates expected to surpass birth rates in the future.
From 1901 birth rates rose dramatically from just over 20,000 to a peak of around 65,000 in 1961. After a slight decline, it remained significantly high, fluctuating above 50,000 until the end of the century. On the other hand, death rates, which was half of birth rates in 1901, maintained a very gradual and steady growth to about 27,000 by the end of the century.
It is projected that birth rates will hover around the 50,000 mark but will start to decline by 2101. Conversely, death rates will experience a dramatic rise after 2021, exceeding the birth rate by 2041 and continuing to rise to a steady rate of about 10,000 above birth rates by 2101.
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